Friday Fictioneers – Answered Prayer

 
Friday Fictioneers

This week’s photo prompt for 100-word flash fiction: RAINBOW. To read more about the details, check Madison Woods Friday Fictioneers.

“Has it calmed down?” Her weak voice was shaking.

“Yes.” He replied and it was sad. The man was wearing all white.

“Will you bring me out?” She asked.

He looked at her on her wheel chair, and his eyes were lonely, but desperate.

Yet, he said, “Outside air will kill you.”

“I only have today, anyway.” She forced a smile.

Sighing in defeat, he brought her outside the hospital. Arriving at the usual spot, he finally said, “Sometimes I think you love rainbows than I.”

“I prayed to God for a rain today. He answered me.” She just smiled.

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GENESIS 9:16

When the bow is in the clouds, I will see it and remember the everlasting covenant between God and every living creature of all flesh that is on the earth.”

MARK 11:24

Therefore I tell you, whatever you ask for in prayer, believe that you have received it, and it will be yours.

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Jenine Silos

Blogger | Writer | Webmaster and a Food Lover | I Loves Jesus

Comments

  1. Aw, this is so sweet and sad at the same time. Well done. Mine is here: http://readinpleasure.wordpress.com/2012/05/18/friday-fictioneers-sinking-low/

    1. Thanks! I notice it, too…HMnn. Quite sad but sweet.
      I’ll check yours, too. ^______^

  2. susielindau says:

    Great use of the prompt! It makes me wonder what she would die of.

    1. Thanks! ^___^ Yeah, even I myself would wonder what she would die of (if I’m the reader)—but wait, I wrote it so I know the cause! Haha. Thanks.

  3. Sandra says:

    Nice one, sad but sweet. Well done.

    1. Thank you very much Ms. Sandra. ^__^

  4. Very nice. Very sweet and sad, speaks of a great love between them. So, don’t leave us hanging – what does she die of??? http://theforgottenwife.com/2012/05/17/friday-fictioneers-2/

    1. Thanks….well, uhm, she had a bone cancer and her lungs were VERY weak! the doctor obviously has predicted her death (I wanted to include this in the story but oh–it’s only a 100 word FF! ^___^)

  5. Michael Fishman says:

    To see one final rainbow… This was a very sad story but sweet as well since it was obvious how much the orderly cared for her. Nice job!

    Here is mine:
    http://michaelsfishbowl.wordpress.com/2012/05/18/and-the-angels-sing/

    1. Yeah, I do think so, too. Everyone is telling me that’s it sad BUT sweet story—which is a good thing I believe! Haha. Thanks.

  6. batyler says:

    Thanks for listing my post in your related articles. :)

    1. sure~ No problem….^_____^
      you can list mine too if you want, nyaha.

  7. elmowrites says:

    Another bittersweet take on the prompt. I struggled a bit with some of your wording but I thought it was a beautiful story and a demonstration of love through the relationship of these two. Nicely done.
    Thanks for your comment on mine. Your readers can find me over here: http://elmowrites.wordpress.com/2012/05/18/friday-fiction-the-lie-of-the-land/

    1. thank you very much…! ^_____^

  8. Hi Jenine, from your comment on my story, I believe you are a felllow Bible scholar. I thought your story was touching, and a kind of cautionary tale about what the future might bring. Good dialog too.

    1. Thank you very much sir, I believe God is working all the time and everywhere. I’m not a Bible scholar though, but I’m learning and still attending modular classes. ^____^

  9. Gary says:

    Ready for death and just wanting to see something beautiful one last time. Nice sentiment here.

    http://garybaileywriting.wordpress.com/2012/05/18/fridayfictioneers-rainbow-memorial/

    1. yeah, indeed! ahahaha..thanks!

  10. EmmaMc says:

    I agree with the above, the dialogue was great. Very authentic. Loved this.

    http://freejournowriter.wordpress.com/2012/05/18/friday-fictioneers-end-of-the-rainbow/

    1. Thank you very much, I appreciate everyone’s comment. It makes us all glad.
      ^__________^

  11. rich says:

    if bringing her outside will kill her, how can she have a usual spot? she’d have died those other times.

    1. the usual spot was when she wasn’t extremely sick yet. ^_________^ she often goes there before.

      1. rich says:

        ooooh. thanks miss.

  12. Lora says:

    Your story is so true-to-life. Having visited a nursing home for a few years, I know this woman who yearns to see her usual spot one last time. She is one of many who have this same wish. Some are accomplished, most are not. Nice work. Here’s mine:
    http://www.triplemoonstar.blogspot.com

  13. Judee says:

    Lovely and sad, but not sad. I think it’s interesting that he was wearing all white – an orderly or something else?